foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on Jan 25, 2007 13:44:37 GMT -5
It's true Reiji Neko Mitsukai, I could do a two pronged storyline, both happy and sad, one can counteract the other in a sense. thats probably wha ti'lld end up doing. the sad one will tie in perfectly with other events but a happy one i need to flesh out a lil more (idea-wise), while I'm working on chapter 4, so hopefully it'll appear Sarah
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Post by Reiji Neko Mitsukai on Jan 26, 2007 1:21:47 GMT -5
I eagerly await. ;D
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foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on Mar 3, 2007 17:56:01 GMT -5
FINALLY!!!!!!! Chapter 4... done... and posted... *collapses* It's a split chapter (I've only posted part 1 so far) only because I got through about 1/4 of what i wanted to write and I was at like 3500 words. I guess the airport scene took up more then I had originally anticipated. So the FloRamone bit will have to begin in part 2... but here's part 1 first. www.fanfiction.net/s/3258291/4/
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Post by CaesarAnavel on Mar 7, 2007 16:10:55 GMT -5
Your review's up
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foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on May 2, 2007 22:26:17 GMT -5
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Post by Reiji Neko Mitsukai on May 2, 2007 22:56:08 GMT -5
Yaaaay! :3
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Post by dodgesuperbee on May 3, 2007 16:18:02 GMT -5
The last two chapters were so different from chapter three and the chapters that led up to that scene, and yet each chapter flows smoothly into the next without any jarring effect. I love the scenes with Nevan, especially when he gets his new tires and Sally and Lightning's love for him (could this be foreshadowing of their own impending parenthood, providing Sally didn't just get some bad fuel?) I like the little details you included such as the diameter of his wheels, which gives an overall idea of his size. Finally, I love the Ramone & Flo romancy stuff. I'll post a review asap.
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foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on May 4, 2007 21:36:37 GMT -5
AWW thanks!! *hugs* Seriously it is appreciated I wasn't sure how this chapter would be received... It's true, Lightning and Sally DO get attached Nevan over the course of a couple of weeks, don't they? That chapter was packed full of stuff, I didn't really get to show much of Elijah and Elle's reaction to Nevan and the whitewalls, Elle and Lightning, etc. I found it was kind of reminiscent of Chapter 2 in it's style - many little scenes that make up the whole chapter, because there was a lot of time and ground to cover. Also, depending on when you read the chapter, I did post a rewrite of the final 2 scenes because when I posted it originally I wasn't completely satisfied with those scenes. I also had cut a lot of stuff out of the chapter, and saved it in a separate document, so I had more to pull from to not necessarily rewrite but to reconstruct that second to last scene. I suggest giving it a reread, even if you just scroll down to that section - Elle and Sally's conversation goes in a completely different direction than before. I was always planning to have the tire thing in there, so I calculated the proportion of baby tires vs. full size tires on a Carrera (which has 18 inch rims) but Dogman15's questions brought me to a whole other set of conclusions about baby cars. Here's what I wrote to him: "Your second question is actually something I was trying to calculate for the next chapter. I try and think of things in proportion relatively...I know a full size Carrera IRL is about 14 and a half feet long, so 2 feet would be a little less than 1/7 of that... I'd say maybe Nevan's 2 1/2 ft long now, maybe 3 ft by the end of the story? I also tried to take into account how big a four month old baby would be compared to a fully grown human (on average)? I suppose there could be plenty of ways to calculate something like that, but no I haven't reached a concrete answer yet. I'm estimating about 2 1/2 ft. Not to mention if there is any proportion differences between an infant car and an adult car, which could possible be the case too. Puppies have large paws; babies have shorter arms and legs in proportion to head and torso, so there could be plenty of differences in proportion between adult and baby cars. I’m still working on figuring that part out. " I don't foresee a long wait for Chapter 6. As a matter of fact, I can't wait to start it! I have a lot planned for it and Chapter 7. I'm not working full time, and aside from the fact that I have a film shoot this weekend and next weekend, Ritz-Carlton certification for work to get out of the way, I'm pretty good for time to myself. Last but not least I need my wisdom teeth out asap this month, so I've made detailed notes on Chapter 6 in case I'm too strung out on tylenol 3's (or more Toradol... lolz) to remember what I wanted to write for it Sarah
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foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on Jul 2, 2007 19:57:13 GMT -5
gah, i totally forgot all about my little fic thread on here! I'm fairly sure everyone who reads mine already knows this, but either way, I updated I Could Get Used To This on June 24th with Chapter 6. WARNING: Some sexually explicit content in the first scene. Just a heads up www.fanfiction.net/s/3258291/6/And yes, although this chapter's kind of taking things in a different direction temporarily, the question still remains as to whether Sally and Lightning are going to be parents... Sarah
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foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on Aug 22, 2007 19:30:05 GMT -5
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Post by Reiji Neko Mitsukai on Aug 22, 2007 22:53:00 GMT -5
I see somebody's been playing the game... XD
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foreignconcepts
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Post by foreignconcepts on Aug 23, 2007 9:06:41 GMT -5
I wish! I don't actually have the game I watched a couple clips from it on YouTube, so I referenced some of the dialogue but thats about it. Sarah
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Post by foreignconcepts on Jan 5, 2008 12:11:40 GMT -5
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Post by Evangeline on Jan 6, 2008 0:09:14 GMT -5
Interesting, very good as usual. I wonder how car females would experience "periods". Maybe not quite the same way we do - they have to be mobile creatures.
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Post by foreignconcepts on Jan 13, 2008 11:31:21 GMT -5
yeah, I agree - that's not something I've 100% figured out either (in the Cars world, I mean, lol) Sorry for the late reply, I haven't been on here or WC in w few days I also do have Chapter 9 posted, which is the conclusion to everything in chapter 8. Fastest update I've ever done www.fanfiction.net/s/3258291/9/I_Could_Get_Used_To_This
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